Teacher Feedback on Rough Cut

I think you have some very good examples of framing and the material selected is absolutely appropriate to the task. Your mise-en-scene selection is also very strong.

In terms of improving your video further I think there are a few things you could do. The purpose of a music video is to sell an artist as well as a song and so it is important that the viewer can see the artist, in detail, as soon as possible. Therefore I think that more close-ups of your two performers earlier in the video could work well. In addition I know that your intention was to create a complete narrative but I think that more performance would only enhance it further. is it feasible for you to film your characters both singing the whole song, in the same costume, ideally in the same or a similarly suitable location?
I also would encourage you to consider adding a filter to more effectively communicate the idea of constantly searching for a lost love. Take a look at this video from last year which is very strong at using filters to great effect in communicating a dream-like world.


Use this video as a basis for thinking about how you could improve your video further.
What you have achieved so far is excellent, keep up the good work.